I once knew a girl who
chased fireflies all summer long,
fished off a dock overlooking a pond glittering in sunlinght,
and sat in the shade sipping sweet tea while she counted train cars passing by her grandpa’s garage.
She leisurely dreamed of bigger things
and read and studied and worked to outgrow her dead end street.
She slept with her windows open and lamp on
and usually went to bed after “just one more page” had turned into fifty or a hundred.
Now
she dyes her hair to hide those growing gray and silvery in the sunlight,
treasures snow days so she can spend time with her children without the clock ticking off unmet responsibilities,
and appreciates books that allow her to accidentally swallow them whole.
Too few of them exist.
The time is gone.
The girl is too.
Mentor text: “I once Knew a Girl” by Nora Bradford
“She read and studied and worked hard to outgrow her dead end street.” I don’t know why that line packs such a punch, but it does. This frame reminds me “I used to be…but now,” by Kenneth Koch. You have certainly made it your own.
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This is beautifully poetic and succinct at the same time! How did you do that? You painted a picture of then and now so seamlessly.
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This slice is so beautiful! I can also really connect to the “just one more page.”
I really love the format… “There once was a girl…” “Now…” I’m adding this to my list of slices to try.
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I loved this poem and the way it captured so many things about the girl’s past and present. I could relate to so much of it — thinking back to my own childhood spent with grandparents for instance. I definitely want to try out this poetic form for myself.
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I love this! I could so see that young girl chasing fireflies and devouring books. Part one is a story all it’s own, beautifully crafted. I’m going to check out that mentor text. Thanks!
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its own – sorry!
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